Survivor
The only thing I could remember was waking up to see fire on the other side of the plane. We were on an island with a lot of palm trees and a big mountain. I smashed the window and woke up my friend and pulled her out the window. We landed on the sand and it looked like no one else was there. Only us on an island with a plane and a lot of unconscious or dead people. Now we have to survive with nothing but a plane that's on the fire and coconuts, trees, along with my best friend. We sat and appreciated that we were still alive and unfortunately the plane was completely on fire.
We spent a few days on the island, nothing much. We just made a hut and ate coconuts. We were on the island for at least 3 days now and we made friends with mister coconut and Mrs coconut and that's mainly it . It was the forth day. I couldn't sleep that night because I was wondering what was going to happen the next day, like if we were going to get rescued or not. I finally fell asleep and woke up a few hours later and there were. ¨PEOPLE,¨ I shouted and accidentally woke up my friend. ¨PEOPLE, ¨ there were people to come save us. They were in a BIG, blue rescue boat . We ran to the ocean and they greeted us while we climbed on board.
Hi Monique, you have a good imagination! I see you have a good understanding of how to structure your narrative and a strong understanding of basic punctuation. Well done. I look forward to seeing you adding more descriptive langauge, wow words and punctuation such as ! : and ;
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